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Friday, August 26, 2011

Romantic Friday Writers__Past the Edge of the Storm

Romantic Friday Writers is a blog fest every Friday. Many thanks to L'Aussie and Francine Howarth for creating this fun event, showcasing the work of many fine writers. Click on the icon at the end of my post to check out others participating today or join the blog fest. A winner is awarded the recognition of being this week's featured author.

Today's challenge is to show 'Smooth Sailing' in 400 words or less. This scene is from my book, Tears on a Tranquil Lake. During a fierce storm at sea, my mermaid heroine, Ciel, is escorted below deck on the Black Hawk, the pirate ship captained by Raphael, who is one of the two suitors she must choose between. Owing to his sailing prowess and strong sense of responsibility, the vessel pulls through to smooth sailing and she gains a new level of respect for him.
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             I gladly accepted his arm. I spent several nerve-wrenching hours in the galley with Dogbone and his hands, not wanting to be alone in the captain’s quarters. At first, I was able to be of use, helping secure gear. After a while, we all came to sit quietly huddled together on the dining benches, holding the tabletop with white knuckles as the schooner tossed, fearful of the storm that raged above. Then, suddenly, the hull steadied. 
            After a few minutes of calm, Dogbone broke the silence. “One of ye lads go above and see if we've passed clear or just be in its eye.”
            The boy returned in a flash, crying out, “We’re clear!”
            “Poseidon challenged the Hawk aright today, but she’s seen worse,” Dogbone said as he stood. Grinning a wide toothy grin he continued, “Ah, mates, we’ve got quick work to do now to feed these hungry pirates. Get to yer tasks.”
            I went on deck and looked past the stern, relieved to see a faint pink-orange glow of the setting sun emerging from around broken edges of storm clouds. Raphael came to my side, looking soggy and worn.
            “She made it through, and all be alive with only some broken bones and bruises. We’ve got some damage to her foremast, gooseneck, and boom, but she be fine to get us to port.”
            I took his hand into mine. “Thank you for keeping us safe.” I held a new respect for him, his dedication, and leadership.
            He raised our entwined hands and brushed the back of his against my cheek. “I'd always keep you safe, my sweet Ciel.” He looked into my eyes and smiled. “I’m going below to get some dry clothes and some food. I’ll join you soon.”
            I watched as he departed, marveling at his courage and fortitude, wondering why I resisted his affections last night.

WC = 311
NCCO/No Critiques, Comments Only


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Marsha A. Moore is a writer of fantasy romance. The magic of art and nature spark life into her writing. She is the author of the novel, TEARS ON A TRANQUIL LAKE, the first in a trilogy. Part two, TORTUGA TREASURE is contracted for release in January, 2012. Look for her first of an epic fantasy romance series, SEEKING A SCRIBE: ENCHANTED BOOKSTORE LEGENDS ONE, to be available late autumn.
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10 comments:

Ruth Madison said...

Rich language and definitely exciting!

Denise Covey said...

Now why did she resist his affections last night? Nice one...

Denise

Raquel Byrnes said...

I'm with L'Aussie...sounds absolutely irresistible.
Edge of Your Seat Romance

Unknown said...

Dear Marsha,
I agree with Ruth, L'Aussie and Raquel, what an enjoyable read!
Makes me wish I were in Ciel's shoes, er, or shall I say 'tail-fin'?
Rich language. I feel that I have travelled back in time and really am aboard this ship as a stow-away!
Will she resist his affections next time? Can't wait to find out!

Best wishes,
Anna

Anna's RFW No. 16 'Smooth Sailing'

Marsha A. Moore said...

I've wondered many times why she resisted Raphael, but characters sometimes make their own choices. :-)

Daydreamertoo said...

Very nice read. Lovely conversations happening and great descriptions of the storm and it's after effects on the ship.
I bet she falls for him!

Li said...

A mermaid as heroine! I do like that, and it lent itself well to this week's theme :-) (And the name Dogbone is both inventive and suitable.)

Ciara said...

Great job. I'm totally taken in. :)

Ms. Queenly said...

An "on second thought" here. I love storms. You landed me in the situation and I wanted to read more! ^_^

Thank you for your comment over at my blog for this challenge, I was humbled.

Marsha A. Moore said...

Thanks much, Ms. Queenly! I do really love the novel you've been showcasing lately.