Today's challenge is 'Up, Up, and Away' in 400 words or less.That speaks to me of new beginnings, sparked by romance. This is an excerpt from my book, Tears on a Tranquil Lake, where the heroine is receiving the "kiss of life" from a merman, to save her from a human death.
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The ‘gator wanted to drown me….make me an easier meal. A chill passed through my body and I shivered. Feverish heat built up inside me, spreading from my head and torso down my limbs. Eventually the wild drumbeat of my heart obliterated everything. I panicked and tried to move, but lacked control of my muscles. Immobile and helpless, I could only listen. The throbbing pulse dimmed as the lake’s waters claimed my life. I submitted…mind blank to all except the faint thump. For an immeasurably long time I heard its rhythm fading away. Seconds or dozens of minutes, I didn't know; altered perception foiled my judgment.
Then, a touch against my face—shattering my delirium.
Fear engulfed my barely conscious mind. What was it? Death seemed welcome compared to experiencing an alligator attack upon my body.
Something soft caressed my lips, not at all like hard reptilian scales.
My sense of touch heightened. Encouraged by returning consciousness, I struggled against the darkness. My eyes searched, yet still failed to see.
Soon, I understood the feeling of lips pressing upon mine. Their burning heat made me panic. I tried to jerk back, but had no muscle control, no way to resist. They forced my lips apart, and a fiery tongue thrust inside my mouth.
In short time my limbs tingled with renewed sensation. Attempting to thrash my arms, I found them both secured.
The mysterious tongue persisted, searing my own.
Strangely, the warmth moved across my entire body and I calmed, mesmerized by this unusual kiss. In some curious manner it restored my consciousness. Peacefulness spread over me, and I accepted this connection as my life force. Our kiss grew pleasurable and I slipped my tongue along the other. Waves of passion rippled through my body and I desired whatever being touched me. Wanting to know more, I opened my eyes. Light pained my limited vision.
A hazy image flashed in front of me.
I pulled back, ending the kiss and viewed a sweep of dark hair turning away, moving up toward the surface.
WC= 343
WC= 343
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Have you read Tears on a Tranquil Lake yet? You can find it at MuseItUp Publishing or Amazon.com. Happy Reading!
9 comments:
I really enjoyed your piece...wow...a merman! A great take on the theme, I like the conjuring of new beginnings.
Love your book title too.
Hello.
Quite the romantic piece.
A merman...now there's a spin on things!
I like the intrigue at the end.
What an intriguing tale. I love tales of the "supernatural" kind (in fact that is one of my favourite tv shows lately. A merman... great twist.
Hi, and welcome to RFWs.
This is rather lovely, and a whole new take on the fantasy of mermen. Nicely written piece of impending death and initial embrace of letting go. Nice twist on Up Up & Away! ;)
best
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I love the sensuality of this, and the merman theme.
Wondering about that 'gator though - did he just evaporate or...? Is there no pain from where he grabbed her ?leg? Was there a feeling of release from the gator's jaws (did the merman kill the gator, or...?)
You had me hooked from the first. A difficult task for the writer. I loved the surprise of the kiss and the healing of her body as she experienced it. Well done.
Nancy
N. R. Williams, The Treasures of Carmelidrium
Hello Marsha.
Thanks for following my blog. I'm your newest follower too!
Thanks for all the great comments and warm welcomes to Romantic Friday Writers! I normally like to jump in during the day and respond to individuals, but had some minor emergencies pop up.
Glad my piece gave a fun read!
Oh wow that was hot hot hot yet under water! I love it :O)
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